Tuesday, March 25, 2008

The Terminal

Hello everyone,

I made a narrative which is based on the movie “The Terminal”. The story is what will happen if Viktor Navorski (Tom Hanks) comes to New Zealand. I hope all of you enjoy reading my narrative.

Viktor Navorski arrives at Auckland airport from Krakozhia, but he still does not know his tragedy in New Zealand.

There are so many people waiting for getting through customs. Viktor also joins the long queue with his small travelling bag and a peanut can. When he is waiting for his turn, he takes off his jacket and shirt, and he takes out a T-shirt from his bag and puts on it. He also changes from trousers to short pants and leather shoes to jandals.
Finally, his turn comes around.

Viktor: “Kia ora, bro!”
Officer: “(doesn’t smile)……..passport please.”
Officer: “What’s the main purpose of your visit?”
Viktor: “Yes, please.”
The officer repeats his words slowly and says
“What is the purpose of your visit?”
Viktor: “Er……(speaks Bulgarian)”
The officer sighs and he calls the director and the chief to take care of Viktor.

After a few minutes the director and the chief come up and take Viktor to an interview room.
Director: “Well, Mr. Navorski, why did you come here? Business or pleasure?”
Viktor: “M…..my pleasure.”
Director: “OK. And how long are you going to stay here?”
Viktor: “(thick Bulgarian accent)How long….? How long….er….I am not so tall.”
Director: “No, no no no, I’m not asking your height. OK, alright. Can I see your return ticket, please?”
Victor: “Return ticket……oh, yes, yes. (shows the ticket to the director)”
Director: “Right. So, you’re going to stay here three months. OK, do you have any food?”
Victor: “Food? Food……, no, thank you. I am full.”
Director: “No, no, Mr. Navorski. (speaks slowly) Do you have any food IN YOUR LUGGAGE?”
Viktor: “No. I know New Zealand, food no good. I no bring.”
Director: “OK, good…..”
The director is going to release Viktor, when a judge comes to whisper to the director.
Director: “Hmmmmmm…….., Mr. Navorski, unfortunately you can’t enter New Zealand. Currently the situation in Krakozhia is very bad, so your visa is no longer valid.”
Viktor: “Krakozhia, bad?”
Director: “Yes. And you can’t go back to Krakozhia right now. So, um, I guess you can stay at this airport.”
Viktor: “OK, thank you. I go to Sky Tower.”
Viktor stands up.
Director: “No, no Sky Tower. You can’t go out of the terminal, alright?”
The director and the chief grab Viktor’s arms and take him to the terminal.
Director: “Mr. Navorski, you can do shopping and you can eat something here, but don’t go through that door.”
The director points out the door between the terminal and the outside.
Director: “Enjoy Auckland.”
Chief: “See ya, mate.”
The chief taps Viktor’s shoulder and he is gone with the director.

Viktor is tired because of the long flight, so he starts looking for a place to sleep. He finds a decent place to sleep, but a man comes close to him and the man talks on the phone.
Man: “Yep….., right….., yep……, right…….”
Viktor ends up moving to another place. To be continued...

Sorry, I did not have a look at the handbook, so I did not know I should have written the draft by last week. However, I already created this story, so I decided to post it without the draft.
Please feel free to comment on this. Any comment is welcome. Thank you!

9 comments:

brens said...
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brens said...

A very good start. I really like your ideas especially when viktor comes to the Auckland terminal and answers the officer's quesions with funny answers, I'm looking forward to read more of the story and know what the ending will be like, Keep up with the good effort. Good work.

haitian said...

good story but needs more NZ life in it. Example describe the people tom hanks meets make them typical kiwi's. Describe the setting to make it more New Zealandish
I really like the jokes and the comedy. Look forward to more of where Tom is going to be located.

Hisako said...

Hi Brens,
Thank you for the comment. Yes, I am making the sequel. But I am not sure whether I can finish the story in 800 words or not.
Even if I cannot finish it, I will try to make it as funny as possible, so you may enjoy reading it :-)

Hisako said...

Hi Haitian,
Thank you for the comment and advice. I will put some more Kiwi's life or tradition in the next story, so it may be much more New Zealandish.
I will try not to disappoint you!

Audrey said...

Hisako- I laughed through those conversations in your story. I thought you did very well with your dialogues and kept the momento to the end of what you have written so far and it kept my interest. Keep on with the story!

Hisako said...

Hi Audrey,
Thank you for your comment. I am glad that you like it.
When I watched this movie, I thought "this is me!". The conversation between Viktor and Officer is actually myself. When I came to NZ first time, I was just like Viktor (I was a little bit better than Viktor though...).

It is nice to have some comment on my work, it encourages me to write more and makes me happy.

Thank you everyone!

danny said...

IT IS A INTRESTING STORY .THE CUSTOM PART IS QUIET INTREST FOR ME.THE QUSTION AND ANSWERING BETWEEN OFFICER AND PASSENGER IS COOL.LOOK FORWARD TO SEE UR STORY

Hisako said...

Hi Danny,
Thank you for your comment.
I hope you will like my next story, too!