the first draft of my stroy

Hi, group:

This is the first draft for my story so far. This is just my interim report because I had missed to report my formative progression of this assignment to lecturers within the deadline. But I intend to re-form this draft with more sharp expressions and correct grammar, and I assure that your comments can help me the progress of my work. Please leave your comments.


The story
In the middle of the battle of the final scene in ‘Planet of the Apes (2001 film)’, the ship of ‘Kink Kong’ party appeared instead of the pod piloted by Pericles (the chimpanzee trained for dangerous space mission in ‘Planet of the Apes). Because the crews of Oberon (the space station in ‘Planet of the Apes’) tried to escape their situation of tumbles through a vortex by warping. This caused to the distortion of time and space, and then, this distortion drew into the ‘King Kong’ party that was on the way to NY in the 2005 film.

When the ‘King Kong’ party landed, the apes interpreted King Kong’s landing as the arrival of their God Semos. They bowed, and hostilities between humans and apes immediately ceased at least the moment. However, General Thade (the leader of apes in ‘Planet of the Apes’) chased Leo (the main male human character of ‘Planet of the Apes’) into the holy temple of apes that was the former space station, and trapped in a portion of the ship as the original version.

Although Leo defeated General Thade, he had no way to leave Planet of the Apes. Then, he began lived with Daena (the female human accompanied Leo’s escape in ‘Planet of the Apes’). The ‘King Kong’ party began lived in the Oberon. ‘King Kong’ was attached to Ann (the actress in ‘King Kong’), so that they could live together peacefully. Additionally, there was a lot of tribute to ‘King Kong’ from apes, so that their lives were assured. Although Ann was satisfied the life because she did not need to work and was with Jack (the screenwriter in ‘King Kong), the other members were not.

Leo had been set up as the chairman of humans without his clear awareness, although he just wanted to find his space station and went back to. Now, he was wearying of his position and the life that was far from the civilization society in which he had lived. Then he often visited the ‘King Kong’ party who were at least more civilized than the humans of planet.

Carl (the filmmaker in ‘King Kong’) heard from Leo that the first version of ‘King Kong’ movie was made in 1933, there are a lot of versions, and they are still popular in Leo’s year 2029. Carl assured that they could go back to their world because the director of the first version must be he. However, Leo said that the directors of the movie are Merian C. Cooper and Ernest B. Schoedsack, not Carl.
‘Merian and Ernest? It’s plagiarism from my idea!’ Carl shouted.
According to Carl’s explanation, he had had not only the map but also some information about the living creatures on Skull Island. He told it to his friends Merian and Ernest.
‘Because they are so-so famous filmmakers, so I thought if I can get their supports for my idea, it would helps me to get the sponsor of my movie. But they didn’t, even showed scornful attitudes. Then I had struggled alone,’ Carl said viciously.
‘If it was true, why they could know that ‘King Kong’ became attached to Ann,’ Leo asked.
‘Why do you ask the question for me? We are here! Who can imagine this fact? Such small strange coincidence could occur. They are filmmakers though not great, and may have a little imagination,’ Carl spat out.
After that, Carl was just grieving over if the ‘King Kong’ party could go back to NY, he would get the fame instead of Merian and Ernest. Jack also had a lingering attachment for his writing.

On the other hand, Attar (the former Thade’s right-hand-man in ‘Planet of the Apes’) became the leader of apes. Although apes acknowledged ‘King Kong’ as their God, human was still an inferior animal for them. Apes were complaint that the humans of ‘King Kong’ party were living in the holy temple of them. It was felt the blasphemy against the holy site. Although Attar had noticed this trend, he thought that it was inexpedient to battle with humans that are leaded by Leo. Attar realized Leo’s power in the previous battle, and did not know that Leo had already used up the energy of Oberon. Apes’ complain was getting intense day by day and the suspicion of Attar’s talent as their leader became rose.

When Ari (the female ape accompanied the escape of Leo and Daena in ‘Planet of the Apes’) visited the holy site, she met Leo who was calling in there. She found the courage to speak the current situation among apes and asks the ‘King Kong’ party to leave the site.
‘Why can you claim the right for station?’ Leo said in the heat of the motion.
‘This is my station, originally… If you force us to do it, I’ll crush you by a battle!’
‘You had already used up the energy of station. How do you intend to battle against apes?’ Jack asked calmly.
‘We have ‘King Kong’. He is attached to Ann. So, if we use Ann as a decoy, he will be our strongest weapon!’
‘ I think there is no solution... I mean… We have no way to go back to our world anymore. We have to realize… We have to live on this planet together with apes forever, ’ the voice of Jack sounded mournfully.

They had taken a vacant glance at Ann and ‘King Kong’ who relaxed at the outside of station. After a long silent, Jack looked back at Leo and Ari, and suggested if they encouraged to set up the ‘King Kong’ party to be apostles of God. Jack explained his idea enthusitastically. Leo would negotiate with Attar about their policies, Jack would make the scenario, Carl would direct Ann’s performance and Ann would perform as the translator of messages of ‘King Kong’ as God’s son. Jack would also write down the events as their bible. At first, Ari protected the plan because she thought that it would blaspheme against the Holy God Semos.
‘We also have our Holy God… But we are here. This is a fact. Don’t you think that this is also His intention? ‘ Jack convinced her.
‘You should consider it and convince Attar, because we can do it at least partly without your partnership, because we have ‘King Kong’, because he is only attached to Ann, not you, as you showed.’

After that, Ari hesitantly informed Attar about Jack’s suggestion. There was a long silent between them, but finally Attar said,
‘Fortunately, I had been taught by General Thade that God is one of means to govern the will of public... It may be the best solution that we can select. ’

During the repeated meeting with Attar, Leo becomes admired Attar’s profound thinking as the leader of apes, and felt that something like responsibility for his position as the leader of humans was springing up in his mind.

When Leo relaxed in his home with Daena, Pericles popped into his mind. Leo vaguely thought where and what period of this planet Pericles landed on. Leo looked up the sky and prayed his safely landing. Daena was looking at Leo, and asked
‘What do you think?’
Leo looked back at Daena and answered with satisfied smile
‘Nothing special.’

(1,126 words excluded the explanation of people’s name, etc in parentheses)